Going to disagree with the turn in later for the carousel comment, I think your line looks fine through there. You are smoothing it out and making it one nice arc instead of having to turn the wheel more sharply and upset the front tires trying to turn in later. In the hairpin I think you could turn in a little sooner with slower wheel action and use those inside rumbles to give you an extra foot or two of track. turn 10 you can also turn in earlier with more entry speed. 17 regardless of if you stay out by the brake cones and follow the white line (The "DE line") or go in brushing your mirror on the wall, you want to get out to that white line and turn in right around where the cone was out there (if you look down, there is an old fading white line intersecting with the clearly visible white line right there). Your distance off the wall in the turn itself was good, but you started pinching your exit to get to that second apex cone past the bridge.... forget about that second cone. try to release the hands as early as possible and let the car track out all the way to the outside wall. Lets you roll onto power more smoothly and earlier.